Soos and the Curse of the Killer Ladder
#21
Seekerdude is right, this is getting interesting.
SOON.
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#22
The 4 short stories you have read are just preludes to the REAL story! I present to you...

SOOS AND THE CURSE OF THE KILLER LADDER
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#23
HOLY CRAP THIS IS ACTUALLY VERY GOOD for a satire
SOON.
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#24
Oh man, now i am hyped. This is gonna be good.
oh funk gotta dronk my honk
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#25
HYPEHYPEHYPEHYPEHYPE
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#26
SOOS' AMAZING DETECTIVE STORY OF AMAZING
THIS MUST BE A REAL SPINOFF SATIRE OF GF
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#27
Until now I was just reading jadedly, saying to myself "Ugh, just some satire. He's just kidding, I shouldn't intervene."
Now I feel surprisingly hyped. Please go on, I'm interested...

The only things I would really reproach to this are the speed of the events and the lack of descriptions (some flaws that are common to most fictions by here, but anyway), including reactions of the characters (in their inner psychology) just as much as anything else that would be relevant to be detailed at the moment ; and on the other hand, I'm not fond of the depiction of Soos you made, I didn't catch his whole kinda "crazy" personality in this narration. I actually didn't understand who was talking until I read "Stan, my boss."

But if it's supposed to just stay the satire it's been since the beginning, I guess I shouldn't be saying this... Well I'll just let my opinion here, just in case.
In anyways, as I told before, I really am curious, so please keep this up.
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#28
^Thanks for the constructive critisim! Now I can try to make my story better!

And yes, it won't really be satire from this point on, but there'll prolly be a joke or two every once in a while.

As for the next chapter, I'm sad to say that I don't know when it'll be out. You see, I'm on vacation with my family, and instead of relaxing, we're in a rush to get to Florida. I'll try to get it in tomorrow, but...

No promises. But I will definitely try to do so.

Also, I want this thread renamed to match the new title: "Soos and the Curse of the Killer Ladder"! That's the new name of this fic.

So since I don't know how to do that, can a mod maybe change it?
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#29
Sure thing DuckHunt!
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#30
(05-31-2015, 03:20 AM)MysterySeeker Wrote: Sure thing DuckHunt!

Thanks dude!
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