Glorious Trash
#61
(06-12-2016, 06:56 PM)Hanaurie Wrote: Pity swelled in his heart as he remembered the condition the poor, broken body had been in when the Seekers had brought her to the Heeling facility. Such pain she'd endured

Darren patted him again. "It will be fine. The Seekers needs information and-"

At the word Seeker, Fords gave Darren a look that could only be described as a glare.

Missed opportunity
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#62
I should resize the ford picture and tell Darth to make it an avatar
If Romance Academy 7 and Fight Fighters are video games that means there are multiple copies with multiple Rumbles and Giffanies

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Memes:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VhD7rdK7rJA
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=njbsOLFL3vs
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FG_JV5gU1LY
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#63
(06-12-2016, 07:26 PM)daJoschi Wrote:
(06-12-2016, 06:56 PM)Hanaurie Wrote: Pity swelled in his heart as he remembered the condition the poor, broken body had been in when the Seekers had brought her to the Heeling facility. Such pain she'd endured

Darren patted him again. "It will be fine. The Seekers needs information and-"

At the word Seeker, Fords gave Darren a look that could only be described as a glare.

Missed opportunity

Fixed

(06-12-2016, 07:32 PM)TanookiNick Wrote: I should resize the Ford picture and tell Darth to make it an avatar

Which one?
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#64
https://drawception.com/pub/panels/2015/...j9tk-2.png
If Romance Academy 7 and Fight Fighters are video games that means there are multiple copies with multiple Rumbles and Giffanies

[Image: giffany_button_by_sparrowag17-d9k3kov.png]

Memes:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VhD7rdK7rJA
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=njbsOLFL3vs
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FG_JV5gU1LY
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#65
(06-12-2016, 08:58 PM)TanookiNick Wrote: https://drawception.com/pub/panels/2015/...j9tk-2.png

Of course.


Okay, I opened the site again and just noticed all the Meyer for some reason thought all her chapters had to be words that ended with 'ed'.
...

Kill me.

Some of my favourites:
Chapter 2: Overheard
Chapter 4: Dreamed
Chapter 24: Tolerated
Chapter 30: Abbreviated
Chapter 43: Frenzied
Chapter 54: Forgotten (HOLY SHIT WE BROKE THE PATTERN PEOPLE! FREE WILL EXISTS!!!)
Chapter 57: Completed (yay)
Chapter 58: Finished (...)
EPILOGUE: Continued (FUCK...also kinda redundant right?)
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#66
Tolerated?

JUST LIKE WHAT I HAD TO DO WITH THIS STORY HAHAHAHAAAAAA
If Romance Academy 7 and Fight Fighters are video games that means there are multiple copies with multiple Rumbles and Giffanies

[Image: giffany_button_by_sparrowag17-d9k3kov.png]

Memes:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VhD7rdK7rJA
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=njbsOLFL3vs
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FG_JV5gU1LY
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#67
^Too true I'm afraid.


I knew it would begin with the end, and the end would look like death to these eyes. I had been warned.

Not these eyes. My eyes. Mine. This was me now.

The language I had found myself using was odd, but it made sense.


Oh...so...this, this is how it's going to be huh? Uhh huh, I see I see...

I had been warned thoroughly of what would happen now. These human emotions would be stronger, more vital than the feelings of any other species I had been. I tried to prepare myself.

Because in all the galaxy no species is more important, or can really feel feelings. I hate this mentality.

Fear locked her in a vise, goading the blunt, clumsy limbs forward but hampering them at the same time. To flee, to run it was all she could do.

...I've read fan-fictions that were written better.
***

I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I hate first person perspective. I HATE FIRST PERSON PERSPECTIVE.

The blackness took all but this: a face.

The face was as alien to me as the faceless serpentine tentacles of my last host body would be to this new body. I'd seen this kind of face in the images I had been given to prepare for this world. It was hard to tell them apart, to see the tiny variations in color and shape that was the only markers of the individual. So much the same, all of them.

Noses centered in the middle of the sphere, eyes above and mouths below, ears around the sides. A collection of senses, all but touch, concentrated in one place. Skin over bones, hair growing on the crown and in strange furry lines above the eyes.

Some had more fur lower down on the jaw: those were always males. The colors ranged through the brown scale from pale cream to a deep almost-black.


...
You just wasted roughly a paragraph describing to me what all of the human race already knows. And you're too lazy to do anything creative with it. This is the definition of boring.

I knew nothing of what passed for beauty among these strangers, and yet I knew that this face was beautiful.I wanted to keep looking at it.
***

Mine, spoke the alien thought that should not have existed.

...




You did it, good job, well done, sentence job well good yes.

Consensus from the first chapter: extremely lazy writing followed by a Mary Sue heroine. I will continue this, right after a chapter of 'Hush Hush'.

Still waiting for someone to spot the hunkle.
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HEY DAJOSCHI!!! :D
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#69
Guys, the end is near

There is a Netflix adaption of iBoy.


Run.



Oh god why.
Why.......
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#70
*evil laughter*
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